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DARK PATHS Prologue + Ch1 by ~Wolftacular:iconWolftacular:



Prologue
In the end, it’s all about making decisions, whether you take them because you believe in yourself, or destiny; maybe even god. You’ve got to think about choices though; the simplest ones may have the toughest outcome.

It doesn’t matter what others think about your choices. It doesn’t matter if your choice was right or wrong. The only factor you should accept is your likeness to it. When others choose, you might end up wondering why they chose that decision; so when you get your turn, pick just what you like the most. Don’t think about anything or anyone else. They’ll get their chance too.

After all, it’s the road of your life. You make the turns. Sometimes, you will be walking light paths, which show you everything that’s ahead of you; they shine the future on you. Sometimes, you will encounter dark paths, which will blind you, trap you, and perhaps terrify you, but they have no guidelines; no fate or written outcome. They make you write history as you go…

Chapter 1: Memoria
I was so hungry that morning! Now, you might not believe me, but I actually found some nice cookie rests on one of the kitchen’s corners, and that was better than anything I was hoping for! Why? Well, let’s just say finding wasn’t an easy task for me, you’ll find out why later. Anyhow, as soon as I took a bite out of the last bit, someone knocked the door and the sound almost knocked ME down.
“Hurry up, little punk!” I quickly grabbed my bag and rushed for the door. I opened the door and the next thing I knew, I was in Ashen’s backpack.
“We’re late now!” she said as she began running, Kuno following her.
“And it’s my fault? Oh yes, I forgot, you waited ages for me to come out” I said sarcastically. Kuno laughed
“Ashen, he’s right. Skip, you don’t want to see her when she’s angry” Ashen immediately gave Kuno a small slap, but he just laughed and we kept going.

I’m hoping most of you already figured the hard part by yourselves, and for those of you who didn’t, I think I should tell you that I am a very small creature; a 4 inch tall fox, to be precise. I was cursed before birth to be this short, but I won’t go in depth about that. You’ll end up finding more by yourselves anyway, so why spoil the fun?

Kuno and Ashen are both wolves… normal, boring wolves. I’m the special one! Maybe I should also tell you that they’re a couple. Enough about them though, but there’s still one last thing I should tell you about before we move on. As you should know by now, we live in a very different world than yours. Over here, all that stuff you read in fantasy stories is real… Well, maybe not everything, but some things are. Just as you know our world from stories, we know your world from dreams, so if you think our world is cheesy, you should take a look at yourselves. Watching anything you want with your TVs, traveling the whole world on planes; and last but not least, allowing your computers and the internet to make your life become as simple as having a snack. Your life is a snack! We can just wish we had stuff like that, ‘cus it’s not so easy over here…

“Alright cubs, class is starting now, read what’s on the board and copy the exercises” Yes, we have school, exactly the way you know it… just without books. Instead, we do it the old-fashioned way: copy and copy and copy from the board. Everyone uses inked feathers and normal sheets, but because of my… size impediment, I use my finger to write instead. Ashen shares her ink with me. I’m on every class she’s in, and you might find it funny that I picked the same classes as her, but not because it was convenient to have her carrying me around; it was actually because she needs my help on certain subjects. Kuno has different academic interests, so we only share a couple classes, but we still meet at lunch, and guess what the every day joke is...
“I’m so hungry, and the line is so long!” then they both stare at me with crazy wolf faces.
“Ha...ha…ha… It’s like the millionth time you guys say that but its so obvious it still makes me laugh”
“Why do you act like a jerk all the time? Chillax!”
“Maybe we should bite your leg off or something so that you appreciate our friendship a bit more”
“I’ll chew on your ears then, but before any of that happens, why don’t we get some real food? Didn’t you say you were ‘so hungry’?” And after some more “hilarious” joking about food, we managed to get 2 stakes. Notice how they got one for each of them, but not for me? No, I only get a little piece, which honestly is enough, but wouldn’t you like to have a bed sized stake?

The ride back home was usually the saddest for me. It was way longer than the ride to school, because we didn’t have to hurry, but it did have an end, which I hated. They’d just drop me off at my house, and they’d leave to kiss or whatever couples do, but I’d be left alone in my little hole. Even though our world has many places for many species of all kinds, sizes, colors, etc, I didn’t really fit in any of them. I’m not sure why I always preferred Memoria over mice cities. The only 2 people I really had were Kuno and Ashen, and I only saw them at school. After school, you could say my life was depressing. I taught myself to avoid falling in love, but you can’t avoid the need of having someone to talk with. I was alone with my curse…

Interesting enough, that day was different. As we were approaching my small house, a trio of stupid hyenas (formerly Van, Lurka and Zerk) sneaked up to us from behind, and one of them said:
“Oooh! What a cute couple and their micro pet!” Unfortunately, before Ashen could react, Van leaped, grabbed me, and quickly took a couple steps back.
“Oooh! I hope you don’t mind me pointing out, but yous three are ‘The Amazing Canines!… and the fox’” The three hyenas burst to laugh.
“Let him go!” yelled Kuno in a very demanding voice
“Oooh! Is that really what you want me to do?” said Van as he held me above his open mouth
“Don’t…!”
“Calm down Kuno, I’ll handle it.” I winked at him and the hyenas chuckled
“Oooh! So yous think…”
“Oooh! How about you stop talking like a retard? We’ve been through this before, and I’m sure you still don’t have the guts to take the slightest bite off me, so just put me down and I’ll try to avoid kicking your butts out of here” The three hyenas burst to laugh again, and it was exactly what I was planning. While they were still laughing, I took off both of my shoes, held them with one hand and winked at Ashen.
“You’re a funny fox, but good things don’t last long” As soon as Van opened his mouth, I threw my shoes right down his throat, and in just a couple seconds, he swung me into the air. Ashen caught me nice and easy, while Van tried to cough out the shoes. Lurka and Zerk both disappeared in an instant, and Van didn’t take long to do so too.
“Thanks” I said
“You are one smart son of a gun, Skip!”
“You know me!”

I asked them to take me somewhere else just for that day, since I was not sure if the hyenas would come back for revenge. They took me to a cave, a bit far away from Memoria.
“Here’s a whole loaf of bread and a shirt that you can use for cover”
“Hmm… I guess I kind of am your little pet after all, huh?” Kuno laughed and said
“Nah, you’re our friend”
“Just a question though, why did you bring me all the way out here? You didn’t have to exaggerate so much, it’s not like the hyenas want me dead”
“Well, it’s near the place we usually hang out in, so… we thought it was convenient”
“Oh” Perhaps it made me feel better to know they were close, but judging by what happened to me that night… they weren’t close enough.
©2009 ~Wolftacular
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Author's Comments

Wow, that was a looot of writting, and lemme tell u, if chapter 1 was that long... you're in for a looong looong ride. Are u up for it? =3

The prologue pretty much presents a point of view on life. Don't take it to seriously though, cause through the story, you will see many different points of view, and then I guess you'll pick whichever one you agree with the most

Chapter 1 was supposed to give more details about Memoria (the city) but then I realized the only cool thing it had was the name, so I ended up focusing more on Skip, the narrator of the 1st chapter. It had its cheesy parts, but hey, I used the counter-cheesiness tactic =3 (ch1, paragraph 3) NAO VALUE UR LIFES!

Now about the style of writting... I picked it because it's easy to bake and digest (easy to write and read lol), it might help some people understand the characters' personalities more and well, i like it and its cool so... btw ima try and keep it clean (no cursing)

I'm sure it has lots of mistakes, haven't written something proper in a looong time, but well, I hope you guys get the best out of it =3

COMMENT+CRITIQUES GREATLY APPRECIATED

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:iconpikabunni:
Wow, I love this story Ax! You gotta keep working on it more, it's really awesome. I think you should add more of how he's thinking, to gain more thought process to keep in-depth. I find a good way to connect through character's is to know how they're feeling and thinking throughout most of the novel. I can't wait until the next chapter, it's a perfect start/introduction.

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KH Sora makes you go, \"Oh, how adorable!\" *pinches cheeks*
KHII Sora makes you go, \"OMG I wanna rape you!\" *tackle*

~~~Thanks =Stained-Mirror for the icon!
:icondillannz:
I cant critique worth anything cause I dont write =3
But I like it, it seems like it has a lot of potential.
I'm looking forward to read more of it.

The only part I found a bit "eh" was the throwing of the shoe down the hyenas throat.

Keep up the good work =D
:iconwolftacular:
Haha thx

Yeah I know, it's not the greatest idea either, but I couldn't think of anything better :XD: :P

Thanks! :)

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:iconwolftacular:
I'm glad u like it! I shall try your tips =3 Thanks! :)

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:iconsunset12:
At first i got confused cuz .. you said the fox was little so i ttought it was ashen's and kuno's baby but then i realized it was like a friend of them XD i really loved the name skkip .. and it maked me remember of that little fox on the cloud remember ?? :3 Xd anyways realy good chapter .. =D can't wait for next chapter .. When i first read it .. i really thought it was like a famous book for the good intro/prologue .. loved it
:iconwolftacular:
lol thx :)

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:iconjadengurldreamer:
The prolouge does really pull you in. I thought it was interesting and I really liked how the POV is first person, but he speaks directly to the reader. It's not common and quite interesting to read that way.
:iconwolftacular:
Yeah the prologue took me a lot of thinking to put into words :p

And I'm awfully glad you like the style or whatever :'D

Thanks a lot :)

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